Lying in Hakkai's bed afterwards, with Hakkai sprawled over him sweaty and naked and asleep, Gojyo wondered if he'd helped, or just made matters worse.

This line is so great - it's so sad. I like the way that they don't talk, almost as if talking would just make everything so much more difficult. It also sums up Gojyo's unspoken concern and his lack of self worth.

As someone else says, I like your take on Hakkai here - I can imagine all this suddenly breaking out of him. Great fic - I really enjoyed this.