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rheasilvia) wrote2006-01-02 12:49 am
rheasilvia) wrote2006-01-02 12:49 am
Saiyuki Fic: Distant Relations (by Sylvia)
Several of you have already seen this - but I thought I'd post it anyway. :-) As always, feedback of all kinds (positive and negative) is very welcome!
Distant Relations
"Well, well," the water-imp said, a distinct hint of condescension in his tone. "What a surprise."
He didn't look much like Jien, or Gojyo's mother for that matter, but there was definitely some sort of resemblance around the eyes and brow.
That wasn't anywhere near being the weirdest thing, though. Gojyo had shouted at Goku just half an hour earlier, for one thing, just because the monkey had been about to jump into the river to cool off after a day of heat and dust and sticky buns.
Even weirder: Goku had listened, and hadn't even whined like he usually did. And Sanzo had just harrumphed and turned away, and Hakkai had smiled and said that they had water for another two days' journey left.
But the really, *really* weird thing was that Gojyo hadn't had any idea just why messing with this river would be a bad idea until he'd gone for a stroll and a smoke and the kappa had come sauntering up, walking up out of the river like it was the most normal thing in the world, all insolent grin and impossibly dry hair and not a stitch of clothes on.
"Nice hair, kid – fiery. Not happy being a water creature, is that it?"
"Not a kid," Gojyo shot back. It came out rather more aggressively than he'd really meant it to be. A little. Maybe. "What's it to you, anyway?"
Whoever had said that kappa were oh-so-big on etiquette obviously hadn't known what they were talking about. Gojyo had always suspected as much, considering. This guy just clinched it.
The kappa was the spitting image of Gojyo, except for the coloring. His hair was a dark, murky brown – kind of like the color of silt on a river bottom, Gojyo supposed – and his eyes an equally muddy green. But other than that? Okay, he was probably a little shorter than Gojyo, though it was hard to tell because of all the bobbing up and down.
Gojyo was pretty sure the bobbing was just for effect, because really, someone who'd come strolling up through the water as though walking up a ramp should have managed to stand on the surface of the river without the showy effects.
"You're a bit young to be looking for your own stream, aren't you?" drawled the nameless kappa, chewing idly on what looked like a strand of kelp. Hah – kelp, in a river? As if. Damned show-off.
Gojyo took a deep drag on his cigarette and blew the smoke across the water, straight into the eery, off-colored reflection of his own face. It worked better than expected – either that or the kappa was a drama queen, because he started coughing and hacking and waving his hands frantically like a virgin giving head for the first time.
Belatedly, it occured to Gojyo that maybe, irritating the guy wasn't really the brightest thing to do, considering he might decide to collapse the bridge or something when they were driving over it tomorrow.
He rolled his eyes and sighed. "Look, we don't want your river. We didn't even touch it or anything."
The kappa made a "yadda yadda" gesture with one hand. Gojyo wondered if *he* ever looked that annoying.
Nah.
"Look, city boy, don't try it with me. If you're just passing through, fine. You want a few pointers, what with being a city rube and all, make me an offer. But touch my river and you'll regret it. I got at least four centuries on you, and you're not even wet behind the ears yet."
Gojyo rolled his eyes again, with feeling. "Yeah, yeah. Hey, wanna play a game of shogi or something?"
For a moment, the kappa just stared at him. Then, he burst out laughing. The river lapped smugly at its banks, and Gojyo stepped back quickly to avoid getting water on his boots. He didn't like this river much, it was just as aggravating as its kappa buddy.
"I like you, kid. How old are you, anyway?"
That did it – Gojyo tossed his cigarette butt straight into the river. "I'm not a kid, you stupid kappa! I'm 22, okay?"
Classic case of the mouth being faster than the brain.
Maybe Gojyo should have remembered that kappa were nothing if not troublemakers, and that they liked to trick people. Even other kappa, looked like.
Not that he knew *how* he'd been tricked, exactly – but the expression on the guy's face...
Gojyo didn't look like that when he had a winning hand, because Gojyo had a damn good poker face. But if he hadn't had one, he suspected he might have looked just like this.
"You're in the right place, little one," the kappa said, and a suspiciously sudden wave deposited him on the banks of the river right in front of Gojyo. "Don't worry – I'll make a proper lord of the river out of you."
The glint in his eye made Gojyo bristle, and there really was no way to be polite about this anymore –
"I'm afraid he already has a guardian."
The cool weight of the shakujou had been pressing into Gojyo's palm, a possibility becoming more solid with every instant. Now, the insubstantial presence dissipated, leaving only a prickle. Hakkai stood a few steps away, a rigid smile fixed on his face.
*A guardian?* But Hakkai gave him a look and Gojyo shut his mouth, stepping back a bit and crossing his arms over his chest. So Hakkai wanted to handle this big-mouthed asshole? He was welcome to the job.
Hakkai's voice was mild when he spoke on, but his eyes glinted far greener, harder and colder than those of the river's kappa. "Gojyo... come here."
Gojyo went, shaking the hair out of his eyes to give the kappa an evil glare as he stopped at Hakkai's side.
"I am passing through," Hakkai stated with immovable finality. "I will take nothing of yours – and you will take nothing of mine."
A possessive hand slid down Gojyo's back, and Gojyo shivered in spite of himself. This was actually kind of a turn-on, so he leaned back a bit into the touch, and the kappa's eyes flicked down to where Hakkai's hand had settled loosely on his hip.
The youkai sniffed the air demonstratively and snorted. "A bug?" Disdain dripped from his words. "Oh, please. The child's a kappa – you can't even teach him –"
"That is not your concern."
They glared at each other for a while, Hakkai's smile never wavering, and even before the kappa tossed his head and sank beneath the surface of his river, Gojyo knew who would come out on top. Only an idiot would get into a staring match with Hakkai.
Hakkai's hand didn't fall away when they walked back to the others.
"I'm not that young," Gojyo grumbled after a bit, though not especially loudly. Most of his irritation had evaporated, and the small, almost caressing movement of Hakkai's thumb on his hip went a long way towards taking care of the rest.
"Youkai customs evidently find otherwise – and this particular youkai seems rather cut off from modern society."
Yeah – he hadn't even known what Goyjo's eyes and hair meant. And of course, he seemed to have missed the minus wave entirely. Couldn't be bothered, probably.
"He kinda looks like me," Gojyo said after another little while.
"He is very handsome," Hakkai replied, and smiled a real smile this time.
Distant Relations
"Well, well," the water-imp said, a distinct hint of condescension in his tone. "What a surprise."
He didn't look much like Jien, or Gojyo's mother for that matter, but there was definitely some sort of resemblance around the eyes and brow.
That wasn't anywhere near being the weirdest thing, though. Gojyo had shouted at Goku just half an hour earlier, for one thing, just because the monkey had been about to jump into the river to cool off after a day of heat and dust and sticky buns.
Even weirder: Goku had listened, and hadn't even whined like he usually did. And Sanzo had just harrumphed and turned away, and Hakkai had smiled and said that they had water for another two days' journey left.
But the really, *really* weird thing was that Gojyo hadn't had any idea just why messing with this river would be a bad idea until he'd gone for a stroll and a smoke and the kappa had come sauntering up, walking up out of the river like it was the most normal thing in the world, all insolent grin and impossibly dry hair and not a stitch of clothes on.
"Nice hair, kid – fiery. Not happy being a water creature, is that it?"
"Not a kid," Gojyo shot back. It came out rather more aggressively than he'd really meant it to be. A little. Maybe. "What's it to you, anyway?"
Whoever had said that kappa were oh-so-big on etiquette obviously hadn't known what they were talking about. Gojyo had always suspected as much, considering. This guy just clinched it.
The kappa was the spitting image of Gojyo, except for the coloring. His hair was a dark, murky brown – kind of like the color of silt on a river bottom, Gojyo supposed – and his eyes an equally muddy green. But other than that? Okay, he was probably a little shorter than Gojyo, though it was hard to tell because of all the bobbing up and down.
Gojyo was pretty sure the bobbing was just for effect, because really, someone who'd come strolling up through the water as though walking up a ramp should have managed to stand on the surface of the river without the showy effects.
"You're a bit young to be looking for your own stream, aren't you?" drawled the nameless kappa, chewing idly on what looked like a strand of kelp. Hah – kelp, in a river? As if. Damned show-off.
Gojyo took a deep drag on his cigarette and blew the smoke across the water, straight into the eery, off-colored reflection of his own face. It worked better than expected – either that or the kappa was a drama queen, because he started coughing and hacking and waving his hands frantically like a virgin giving head for the first time.
Belatedly, it occured to Gojyo that maybe, irritating the guy wasn't really the brightest thing to do, considering he might decide to collapse the bridge or something when they were driving over it tomorrow.
He rolled his eyes and sighed. "Look, we don't want your river. We didn't even touch it or anything."
The kappa made a "yadda yadda" gesture with one hand. Gojyo wondered if *he* ever looked that annoying.
Nah.
"Look, city boy, don't try it with me. If you're just passing through, fine. You want a few pointers, what with being a city rube and all, make me an offer. But touch my river and you'll regret it. I got at least four centuries on you, and you're not even wet behind the ears yet."
Gojyo rolled his eyes again, with feeling. "Yeah, yeah. Hey, wanna play a game of shogi or something?"
For a moment, the kappa just stared at him. Then, he burst out laughing. The river lapped smugly at its banks, and Gojyo stepped back quickly to avoid getting water on his boots. He didn't like this river much, it was just as aggravating as its kappa buddy.
"I like you, kid. How old are you, anyway?"
That did it – Gojyo tossed his cigarette butt straight into the river. "I'm not a kid, you stupid kappa! I'm 22, okay?"
Classic case of the mouth being faster than the brain.
Maybe Gojyo should have remembered that kappa were nothing if not troublemakers, and that they liked to trick people. Even other kappa, looked like.
Not that he knew *how* he'd been tricked, exactly – but the expression on the guy's face...
Gojyo didn't look like that when he had a winning hand, because Gojyo had a damn good poker face. But if he hadn't had one, he suspected he might have looked just like this.
"You're in the right place, little one," the kappa said, and a suspiciously sudden wave deposited him on the banks of the river right in front of Gojyo. "Don't worry – I'll make a proper lord of the river out of you."
The glint in his eye made Gojyo bristle, and there really was no way to be polite about this anymore –
"I'm afraid he already has a guardian."
The cool weight of the shakujou had been pressing into Gojyo's palm, a possibility becoming more solid with every instant. Now, the insubstantial presence dissipated, leaving only a prickle. Hakkai stood a few steps away, a rigid smile fixed on his face.
*A guardian?* But Hakkai gave him a look and Gojyo shut his mouth, stepping back a bit and crossing his arms over his chest. So Hakkai wanted to handle this big-mouthed asshole? He was welcome to the job.
Hakkai's voice was mild when he spoke on, but his eyes glinted far greener, harder and colder than those of the river's kappa. "Gojyo... come here."
Gojyo went, shaking the hair out of his eyes to give the kappa an evil glare as he stopped at Hakkai's side.
"I am passing through," Hakkai stated with immovable finality. "I will take nothing of yours – and you will take nothing of mine."
A possessive hand slid down Gojyo's back, and Gojyo shivered in spite of himself. This was actually kind of a turn-on, so he leaned back a bit into the touch, and the kappa's eyes flicked down to where Hakkai's hand had settled loosely on his hip.
The youkai sniffed the air demonstratively and snorted. "A bug?" Disdain dripped from his words. "Oh, please. The child's a kappa – you can't even teach him –"
"That is not your concern."
They glared at each other for a while, Hakkai's smile never wavering, and even before the kappa tossed his head and sank beneath the surface of his river, Gojyo knew who would come out on top. Only an idiot would get into a staring match with Hakkai.
Hakkai's hand didn't fall away when they walked back to the others.
"I'm not that young," Gojyo grumbled after a bit, though not especially loudly. Most of his irritation had evaporated, and the small, almost caressing movement of Hakkai's thumb on his hip went a long way towards taking care of the rest.
"Youkai customs evidently find otherwise – and this particular youkai seems rather cut off from modern society."
Yeah – he hadn't even known what Goyjo's eyes and hair meant. And of course, he seemed to have missed the minus wave entirely. Couldn't be bothered, probably.
"He kinda looks like me," Gojyo said after another little while.
"He is very handsome," Hakkai replied, and smiled a real smile this time.
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lol, and so many great lines. Especially loved, "because he started coughing and hacking and waving his hands frantically like a virgin giving head for the first time"--that's wonderfully original and startlingly clear imagery. XD
I have such a weakness for stories that touch on Gojyo's kappa roots. ^_^ This was wonderful! Thank you.
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I confess I have a weakness for possessive!Hakkai, as well... and for the kappa question, too. Considering that youkai are an entirely different species, there must be huge differences that canon only vaguely touches upon - and if canon can't take time to go into these differences, hey, that's what fanfic is for. *g*
wonderfully original and startlingly clear imagery
It seemed like a comparison that might pop into Gojyo's mind. ;-)
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A bug
Well, really, a mere bug presuming to raise a noble and handsome kappa, a future lord of the river? What cheek!
And... the kappa is sexy? Hm...
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you never get into ANY kind of match with Hakkia if your smart
*g* Particularly not if he *smiles* at you oh-so-politely and kindly...
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Mythological kappas had holes in the tops of their heads where they kept water
:-) Yep! Sanzo would gladly help out, I think...
"Saiyuki" seems to throw kappa lore overboard more or less completely... which might indicate either that the myth of the kappa has very little truth to it in this universe, or that Gojyo's family was simply very out of touch with kappa culture and their inner youkai. ;-)
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Hakkai = ♥
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Lovely.
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And - yes, I also have a slight weakness for Possessive!Hakkai. *g*
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Glad you liked the story - and Hakkai. :-)
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I loved it!!!! [drools]
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Just one thing: in the beginning, when you write He didn't look much like Jien, or Gojyo's mother for that matter, but there was definitely some sort of resemblance around the eyes and brow. , it was a bit difficult to get what you were talking about. It would be better if you somehow managed to combine it with this paragraph:
The kappa was the spitting image of Gojyo, except for the coloring. His hair was a dark, murky brown – kind of like the color of silt on a river bottom, Gojyo supposed – and his eyes an equally muddy green. But other than that? Okay, he was probably a little shorter than Gojyo, though it was hard to tell because of all the bobbing up and down.
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Also, thank you for your very constructive criticism. I really do mean it when I say all kind of comments are welcome, and I'll see what I can do about the problem!
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Thank you for the lovely echo! :-) Possessive!Hakkai is not just popular with Gojyo (and me!), it seems. *g*
Hm... Maybe I *should* get the Real Kappa trademarked. ;-)
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And Hakkai's solution to the problem was definitely more pleasant than Gojyo's would have been. :-)
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I often wonder about the differences between both youkai and humans and youkai of different kinds - canon doesn't give us all that much to work with. I've read some lovely stories about Hakkai's youkai instincts and capabilities - though not nearly enough! By most fans, Gojyo seems to be seen as more or less entirely human, though. That can't really be true - can it? He *lives* as a human, yes, but... the bottom line is: He's not.
The kappa question is fascinating in itself, I think. Is the traditional kappa mythology totally irrelevant for the Saiyuki universe, or does some of it still apply? How does Gojyo deal with the kappa part of his heritage - what does it mean for him? He can't know much about it himself, given his childhood, and as a half-breed, many things will be different for him, anyway...
Right - enough rambling. Will shut up now.:-)
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Amazing how you could make "inexperienced" Gojyo ;-) work.
As a kappa, Gojyo is a mere babe in the woods! A lot of water will have to flow down the river before this kappa earns his fins. ;-) I hadn't thought of it as inexperience before, but now that you mention it...
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again, you write stories that are so utterly wonderful! hakkai is just so...hakkai! so absolutly calm and possesive and right! and typical gojyo, getting into trouble and having hakkai help him out.
^_^ keep on writing!
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typical gojyo, getting into trouble and having hakkai help him out
Poor Gojyo, all he did was stretch his legs a little and grab a smoke - and Hakkai has to ride to the rescue. *g* Well, neither of them minded too much in the end, I think, and all's well that ends well... ;-)
keep on writing!
Oh, I will! :-)
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Thank you for the card btw!
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(Worth a try. ;-) )
You're very welcome for the card - thank you for yours!
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Claiming!Hakkai makes me go all melty, and you've written the underlying youkai relationships in a really good way -- not overdone, but clearly there's a lot of history there that has the characters acting the way they do. Mmm.
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He does do that well, doesn't he? Gojyo is a big fan of this version of Hakkai, too. :-)
All the while Hakkai is probably even less light-hearted about this entire episode than he seems. It's a good thing for that kappa that he had the sense to quit when the quitting was good.
Thank you for your lovely comments! I'm very glad you liked the story - and that someone on your friendsfriends-list did, too. :-)
Like It!
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Actually, I'm not in fandom myself, but a friend of mine gave me a link to this fanfic, because I need a story to translate for russian yaoi fest (challenge), so... err... I hope to have your permission to translate this fanfic )))
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Could you let me know where you are sending and/or posting the translated version, please? I'd like to see it in Russian!
Also, if you could keep my email addy with the story for feedback (even if I'd have to find a translator for it *g*), and maybe a link to the English version, that'd be great!
Thanks again for the lovely compliment! :-)
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It seemed an interesting idea to have Gojyo run into another kappa, and all of the subtleties and rules of youkai society that he knows nothing about... Hakkai, of course, knows just as little, but he's not the man to be stopped by that sort of minor detail. *g*
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and found this one ..
i liked finding out more things about youkai
and seeing differences... and similarities
hakkai is possessive here.
but he's still cool even when being so...
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hakkai is possessive here.
but he's still cool even when being so...
Oooh yes, Hakkai is *always* cool. Just ask Gojyo. ;-)