rheasilvia: (Junno sexy)
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Disclaimer: This is pure fiction.
Pairing: Taguchi Junnosuke / Nishikido Ryo
Rating: NC-17 for explicit m/m sex. Also, bondage.
Story notes: AU, slightly more than 31,000 words. Various other JE characters – as well as two non-JE ones – appear in supporting roles.
Betaed by: [livejournal.com profile] diamondsofsix, [livejournal.com profile] k_julia and [livejournal.com profile] solo____ – all of whom helped immeasurably. Thank you very much! This story would be very different – and much worse – without you. [livejournal.com profile] solo____ deserves special thanks for going above and beyond.

Summary:
Detectives Nishikido Ryo and Taguchi Junnosuke go undercover in a gay BDSM club run by the mob. Ryo is not happy about this, though not for the reasons you might expect.


First Contact


As always, feedback of all kinds – positive and negative – is very much appreciated!

Date: 2009-06-01 07:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xplodey-di.livejournal.com
OH MY GOD.

I LOVE THIS AND YOU AND THIS IS AMAZING AND ALSJDFLAWEKJFALKJFALSKJEFLASDFLJWAL HOW IS ANYONE MANAGING TO STAY COHERENT IN THE FACE OF THIS I DON'T EVEN KNOW

You have no idea how long it took for me just to come up with that.

It basically boils down to this: ♥

Date: 2009-06-01 07:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xplodey-di.livejournal.com
I feel the need to... idk. Attach myself to you, which I mean in the noncreepiest way ever.

I think you broke my brain. I really just mean I'm going to friend you now.

Date: 2009-06-01 09:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xplodey-di.livejournal.com
I really am more intelligent than this, I swear. I will possibly actually leave a constructive comment that makes up for the 8935719854 comments I left before (and can you believe, I actually typed "qoweiuroqitw" and didn't even comprehend that those weren't even number until a second later?), but I suppose that will have to happen when rereading this fic doesn't leave me in a pile of brainless goo.

Date: 2009-06-01 11:46 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] rheasilvia.livejournal.com
YAY!! I am very very glad you liked the story so much. Thank you for flailing! :-)

I will possibly actually leave a constructive comment that makes up for the 8935719854 comments I left before

There is no need to make up for anything! I am actually hugely flattered that your enthusiasm bubbles over in the comments like this. :-) That's a great and wonderful thing!

Which is not to say that I wouldn't be extremely happy for another comment, because I most certainly would, but that's just an author being greedy. :-)

Date: 2009-06-02 02:14 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xplodey-di.livejournal.com
*sheepish* I've never been thanked for flailing before. Yay?

...well, actually, I'm sorry to say, that my constructive comments aren't much more coherent than the ones I've left here anyway. Gah. But - okay. Going to give it a shot before my brain melts down again.

I thought your characterization of Ryo was really well done. As a protagonist and the sort of main POV, he did his job well by drawing the reader (ME) into his thoughts and feelings and the plot in a way that not only made me feel invested in the story, but also as if I was experiencing the story through his eyes. Of course, I also enjoyed just laughing at him. :) I also thought the way you wrote Junno was brilliant, but it may be my own bias talking; he was adorable and intelligent and sexy and almost irritatingly cheerful all at once in that kind of unfathomable way that Junno is. It's one of the most believable characterizations of Junno I've ever seen in fic based on his TV personality.

Overall, I think the plot and the development of Ryo's feelings towards Junno was very well paced and I loved the world that you built for them, and how very believable it is, not to mention how you cast the familiar JE boys into roles that at first seem very "what? really?" and make it surprisingly realistic and understandable (because, of course Nakamaru would be doing that, and I love him ♥) and also, I would just like to say, I laughed a lot whenever you brought up the evil gnome thing.

Lol, evil gnome. I just like saying the word gnome.

asjdflkj sorry, my brain degenerated fairly quickly. Also, I can't say how accurate this "constructive comment" is, because I finally decided I just shouldn't read it before attempting one. ._.

Date: 2009-06-02 09:58 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] rheasilvia.livejournal.com
I also enjoyed just laughing at him

Ryo would have you know that HELLO, there's nothing to laugh at! Honestly, some people. *mutter*

Glad to know his POV worked! :-)

adorable and intelligent and sexy and almost irritatingly cheerful all at once in that kind of unfathomable way that Junno is

:-)))

It's really great that you like the Junno in this story so much. Because the story is from Ryo's POV, I was afraid at times that Junno would not come through enough as a person - that the reader wouldn't get a clear enough sense of who he is (and why Ryo should change his mind about him, and then some). But it seems my fears were unfounded, and that is a wonderful thing. :-)

As an aside: You may have noticed that I am rather fond of the man myself, so I can't claim to be bias-free, either - but to tell you the truth, I don't feel that a Junno-bias is such a horrible affliction. *g*

YES, Nakamaru would be a great researcher and requisitions officer! He would be ruthlessly thorough and feared far and wide for his detail-oriented work-style. I really don't know who else would do that job as well as he does. *g* Glad you agree!

The gnome... yeah. *g* ;-)

I think you write a very nice line in constructive comments, too, not just in flailing. :-) Thank you again!

Date: 2009-06-03 02:02 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xplodey-di.livejournal.com
*giggles* I almost always feel the urge to just pat Ryo on the head. I don't know. I feel like if I tried, he would bite me.

but to tell you the truth, I don't feel that a Junno-bias is such a horrible affliction. *g*
Dude, totally agreed.

OH MY GOSH, NAKAMARU SO WOULD. He would drive people mad with it, but asdlkjfaw whatever :DDDDD I have such a fondness for Nakamaru and Junno it's ridiculous.

Hahahaha! Of course. :)

Date: 2009-06-01 11:42 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] rheasilvia.livejournal.com
I feel the need to... idk. Attach myself to you, which I mean in the noncreepiest way ever.

LOL! Yes, please go right ahead. :-) (Love the way you phrased that. *g*)

Date: 2009-06-02 02:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xplodey-di.livejournal.com
Hahaha, I'm glad, even though I'm also incredibly mortified. ♥

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